The Cold Desire
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La suite 4
IV

Victor was wandering about without any proper reason. He couldn't find Karen inside the school from the moment he woke up. He just disappeared in the mid air without a word. Victor suspected that Karen and Severus went to the village to have a beer but when the time for dinner came, Severus was there and no Karen. Victor started to worry but was too embarrassed to go to Severus and ask about this sudden disappearance. Karen was a busy man and even during school he was missing some lessons because of his company, so Victor decided to wait until next day and then call him maybe. He really wanted to sleep in their bed, in Karen's room but it was too risky without Karen around. Suddenly this whole Christmas time and staying in the school started to be really unpleasant for Victor.
The dormitory seemed to be so cold, dark and depressing that Victor started getting creeps when there was even the tiniest noise in the room. He couldn't sleep at all and was very close to crying for somebody to come. But he was alone, there was nobody else sleeping in his dormitory. Victor sat on his bed and reached for his mobile, lying on the table beside his bed. At first he wanted to call Karen but he could be busy so Victor decided to call Kurt. It was already four in the morning, but he didn't care and the need to talk with somebody was urging him to make this call.
- Hello…? Mum…I don't know who that is…I really don't know how is it possible that this person is lying under me…it must've been some sort of an accident…and those things lying on the floor are balloons mum, balloons… - Victor heard Kurt's sleepy voice.
- Kurt? What the hell are you talking about? And from when I'm your mum? Are you a loony? - Victor was pretty much shocked by this monologue. - And what are you talking about?
There was a moment of total silence and the ashamed grunt followed soon after.
- Victor…? Do you know what time is it now? And you are saying that I'm the loony?
- I know it's late, but I just needed to talk with somebody… - Victor sighed.
- Something happened? What's wrong? - Kurt sat straight and rubbed his eyes with his hand. - Did he do something to you?
- What? Why do you thing about something like that… - Victor moaned. - I don't know! - He cried suddenly. - Karen left this morning without a word and just disappeared, and told me nothing!
- Well…he was disappearing sometimes. Severus should know, he always knows, go and ask him if you are worried. - Kurt sighed with relief: he thought that something bad happened. - Everything is fine, I'm sure of it.
- Thanks…you cheered me up a bit. - Victor smiled.
- I told you that staying was a bad idea. He will be busy and you will be all alone there, catch a train and come here Victor…
- I will be fine, really…as long as Karen will have some free time for me. - Victor laughed. - Anyway, what were you babbling about just then?
- It…it was a dream, just a dream! - Kurt blushed a bit.
- Yeah right! So why are you stammering so badly now? - Victor was giggling like crazy. - Did she saw you with some hot girl, Krish perhaps?
- No, me and Krish…it didn't work out in the end. She dumped me…well, we dumped each other.
- What? When? - Victor blinked with shock. - But you were so into her! How is it possible?
- Well…I liked her, but she is not for me. We differ too much, I'm too boring for her and she is too energetic and sweet as for my taste.
- Well…you really gave me a shock! So who was this girl that you were with?
- I told you already! It was a dream! Really, believe me just once.
- So who were you dreaming of? Do I know her? - Victor went downstairs to the common room. It was much more comfortable and warmer than the bedrooms.
Victor sat down on the sofa in front of the fireplace and smiled with pleasure of warmth going through his body. He decided to sleep here, he felt much more secure in the brighter and much quieter common room.
- Yes… - Kurt grunted. - You know her very well… - His voice was trembling and he was really embarrassed now.
- Then, who is she?
- I won't tell you, so don't ask because you will only annoy me. And go back to sleep now Victor…I'm really tired. Call me if you need me okay? I will be waiting for your call about Karen, give me a shout if everything will be clear.
- Okay…I will. Take care Kurt…I really miss you here. - Victor sighed.
- You should've come with me… - Kurt smiled softly. - Now you will be sitting there alone and afraid to sleep in your own bed…are you downstairs yet?
- Yup… - Victor sniffed.
- Hey, don't worry. Tomorrow Karen will surely appear again and you will be happy! And now sleep tight.
- Don't let the bed bugs bite… - Victor grinned. - Bye, Kurt…I will call you tomorrow.
- I'm counting on it! Bye. - Kurt hanged up and fell on the pillow. - Victor…I have a bad feeling about this bastard Karen…I hope I'm wrong.
Kurt was just after some party with lots of alcohol, so he was still pretty much drunk and chewed up so, even though he was really worried about Victor, he couldn't stay conscious and fell asleep in an instant.

The next day came way too soon for Victor. He was waked up by a bright sunbeam shining straight into his eye. He murmured with anger and tried to cover his face with a pillow or arm but it was still hurting his eyes. Victor sat up and looked around: he couldn't really remember how he came to sleep in the common room just yet. He looked at the clock, it was already three o'clock, time for breakfast was over long time ago and it was time to go for dinner. Victor stretched his painful joints and slowly went upstairs to change his clothes and take a shower. He hoped to find Karen in the apartment and that thought kept him going. Victor wanted to go to Karen's room first and then, both of them will go to eat. The shower was refreshing and washed away all bad thoughts and pain from Victor's body. He stepped out from the bathroom as if he was completely reborn. Yesterday Victor couldn't sleep and was nearly crying but now he was relaxed and happy, filled with hope and positive energy.
- Time to go and fetch Karen from his bed…he is probably also asleep after a night out. - Victor smiled to himself and went outside, rushing towards Karen's room.
The doors leading to Karen's place were locked, unlike yesterday when Victor didn't lock them. Victor smiled happily and took out his own key. He was careful not to let anybody see that key and when he was completely sure that he is alone, he went inside. Everything was quiet and seemed to be lifeless, abandoned. Victor sighed and ran to the bedroom, hoping to see Karen sleeping or maybe sitting in the workshop and drawing. But he wasn't there and the bed was also cold and empty, looking exactly like it was left yesterday. Victor covered his mouth, sudden fear and distress grew inside him. Tears suddenly run from his eyes, Victor couldn't hold them any longer.
- N-no, he didn't leave…he would've told me! Stop it! Stop! - Victor tried desperately to stop the tears and wipe his eyes dry. - He probably was sleeping on the coach, drunk and all…and now is sitting in the canteen. Have to go there…! - Victor ran from the apartment and was running until he had no energy left.
When he had to stop for a moment to catch his breath, a group of teachers were passing by, probably going for dinner. They were whispering about something with excitement, but failed to keep their voices low enough to keep the conversation for themselves. Victor started listening after he heard Karen's name being mentioned several times.
- I have heard that he left yesterday and stayed in the village until today, waiting for the train…
- Oh, that's exactly what I've heard but it seems that he wasn't alone! Someone was with him in the hotel and they left together! - The woman teacher seemed to be the most excited person in this group.
- Shush! Keep your voice down Mary, someone might hear you… - The older teacher was nervous but also knew something more. - I have heard that Lavi left too…and it was him who left with Karen, can you believe this?
- Really? Were they like a couple or something? - Young man, who Victor recognised as a Maths teacher was pretty shocked.
- Katie said that after a suspicious conversation with Lavi, Karen dumped her…well, forgot about her completely to be precise. - Mary, the woman teacher remembered suddenly. - She was really sad, you know…young, na?ve girl hoped that Karen was in love with her.
- Hah, couldn't be farther from the truth! Karen and romantic love, everybody know that he is not interested in that! Only money, sex and power…that's what is important in his life.
Victor was shocked and couldn't move a muscle. The teachers walked away but he was just standing there, trying to understand what he just heard. If teachers were saying that Karen left…then it was probably true. Victor's heart ached; he left like it was breaking into pieces. Now he was only a boy, a na?ve boy that wanted Karen to truly love him…but the dream was suddenly ripped by reality. Karen didn't care about him, Victor was just a toy as many others before him. Victor was saying to himself that he will never give into this relationship completely…but he did and now, he felt like he was dying, that somebody took a vital part of his body away. He wanted to cry, to burst into tears and disappear. But it was impossible and Victor knew it very well. There are better ways to feel better, to feel relief. He clenched his teeth, took out his mobile and picked Karen's number. There was silence and then the voice that Victor hoped not to hear:
- The number you are trying to reach is currently unavailable or invalid. Please try again.
Victor sighed and looked around. He was Severus slowly walking to the canteen. Severus was the last source of information, true information that Victor could think about.
- Uncle! Uncle! Wait a moment! - Severus turned around and smiled to Victor when he was hurrying towards him.
- Well, hello there. - Severus hugged him. - Feeling better now? You weren't here on the breakfast. I was a bit worried.
- I overslept…. - Victor smiled. - Uncle, can I ask you something?
- Of course, that's what uncles are for. I'm listening. - Severus smiled, wrapped his arm around Victor and they started walking towards the canteen.
- Well…do you know where professor Rosenberg is now? I…have some work for him to check. - Victor lied with a blush.
- He left today. Karen had some problems with his corporation and I was actually able to find somebody on his place so he took the morning train. - Severus sighed and smiled a bit. - I was afraid that this would happen…he was so fond of your mother in the past. I wanted to avoid this situation but I've failed to protect you….I'm sorry Victor.
- What….? So you knew about me and…him? - Victor blushed even more and was completely embarrassed.
- Of course I knew…I know everything about this school's affairs. - Severus smiled for a moment. - Victor, I will have to forget about it, are we clear? He is not good for you and you are too young for him…it would've never worked between you two. I know it's cruel but also true.
- I know uncle…I will try to forget about him as soon as possible. - Victor had to fight off the urge to cry, he was devastated.
- I think that you should go home now, it will be better for you to go back. You should have proper Christmas and New Year's Eve. I will call your father after dinner, so please come to my office after the meal, okay?
- Yeah, I will come. You think that dad will be able to take me home today…? - Victor really wanted to see mum and dad…and Kurt mostly. He needed to cry his troubles away.
- Of course! Vincent would do everything for you. - Severus laughed. - It's funny that everybody is so scared of him and he is so weak when it's about you! He will send a chopper to fetch you probably, so you will be home today. Remember to kiss him and Mary from me!
- I will remember for sure. - Victor laughed. - Actually, where is professor Rodko?
- Lavi…he left with Karen. They bounded pretty closely…I'm sorry Victor. Things like that happen, Karen always loved to be chased and Lavi did it because he could.
- It's fine, I'm happy for him then…at least somebody will be happy. - Victor smiled. - I just want to go home now. I want to relax and think about something else.
- Then let's go eat, the sooner we will start, the sooner we will finish. - Severus smiled and they both went to the canteen.
As soon as Victor started eating his chicken wings with chips, his mobile started ringing. For a moment Victor jumped up with excitement, but then realized how stupid it is. And he was right; the one calling wasn't Karen but Kurt.
- Hi Kurt, why are you calling? - Victor nearly choked trying to swallow all the food he had in his mouth.
- Well, maybe because you promised to call and didn't?! What's that noise…? What are you doing now!
- Eating my dinner you pervert! Gosh, you really are unbelievable! Find yourself a girlfriend or something. - Victor sighed.
- Shut it now! What's with Karen? Did you find him or not?
- Not…he left without a single word of goodbye. Karen by now is probably in Los Angeles…with his new lover, professor Rodko! - Victor tried do laugh happily but it didn't work so well.
- With Rodko? Well…he is pretty, that's for sure. - Kurt started thinking out loud. - Intelligent and talented…and in just the right age. He is awesome…Karen has a really good taste.
- Kurt…I was dumped for god's sake! Don't babble about things like that when I can hear them!
- Oh, sorry Victor. Well, you are coming back home now, don't you?
- Yes, I am actually…and I would really use a night out with lots of drinks. - Victor sighed with pain.
- You can count on me, love. Are you going by train? - Kurt smiled happily. He was actually happy that Karen left, Victor will be himself again and the old times will be back.
- I think that dad will send a chopper for me. I should be back in the evening.
- In the Farenhigh Corp.?
- Of course, where else? - Victor laughed. - In the middle of the street?
- Call me before you will leave the school then, okay? I will wait for you in the firm.
- Fine, I will call if you will promise to take me someplace fun. I really need to have some fun.
- Of course I will! Did I ever disappoint you if it's about clubbing, parties and such? - Kurt laughed.
- No, never. But now I'm starving and my dinner is getting cold, so goodbye and I will call you later. Bye Kurt! - Victor hanged up and started eating in a hurry; he was supposed to go to Severus' office any minute now.

When he finally finished eating and went to see Severus, the whole half an hour passed. He knocked and went into uncle's office.
- Sorry that I'm late… - Victor whispered and sat down on one of the armchairs. Severus was on the phone, so he only nodded.
Victor hoped that his uncle was able to call his dad and that the chopper was on its way to pick him up. With every minute in this school he was feeling worse and every corner was reminding him of Karen. Victor relaxed a bit in this office, because this place was always carrying memories of his youth and visits form his parents. It was like a small part of Victor's own house.
- I apologize for that…A sudden phone call from my friend. - Severus smiled to Victor, ending his contemplation. - Vincent has sent a chopper for you, so it should be here any minute now. Go, pack your things and be ready.
- Oh, okay…that was pretty fast. - Victor laughed. - I will go then…do you want me to say something to mum or dad from you?
- Ask Mary to call me, I wanted to meet with all of you this year.
- Mum will be happy. She was always complaining about your absence during Christmas.
- Great, we will be waiting then. - Victor hugged Severus. - Mum will call you today for sure.
- Probably. - Severus laughed. - Enough of this love of yours…!Go now!
Victor laughed, waved to Severus and went to his room in a hurry. He had to pack up quickly.

***

Kurt was watching the sky over his head, waiting on the roof inside the glazed room. He had to work really hard not to smile happily because of the situation. Karen left, Victor was free again and his time belonged to Kurt now, he couldn't be more happy. The sky was beautifully blue, with some purely white clouds, even the weather seemed to be happy for Kurt. He had it all planned now, what they will do tonight. Kurt found a new club in the city centre and wanted to take Victor there, to relax and have fun. After few hours of drinking and dancing, they will go to his house because Kurt's mother was away and his dad had an important meeting tonight. Kurt has pizzas, coke and alcohol waiting for Victor, all should be great. Kurt looked up again, hearing the chopper; it was getting closer, making a lot of noise. Kurt saw it and laughed happily.
- You little punk, I would have loved to fly in the chopper once too! But it's your dad that is the boss here. - Kurt waved to the chopper when it was slowly landing on the roof. Victor waved back from the inside but had to wait until the blades stop moving.
Victor smiled to him and leaned over the pilot's seat and grabbed his shoulder.
- Thanks Pete, you really are an angel. - Victor smiled. - If it wasn't you I would be crying my eyes out in this depressing place…
- You mean school young master? - The pilot laughed and patted Victor's head. - You will be in my debt for this one. I actually have a day off today!
- I didn't know about that! I'm sorry…I will talk to my dad now. You will get another day off as a repay. I promise. - Victor looked at Kurt. - I have to go now, Kurt is waiting. Take care and have a nice day!
- Sure, it will be nice as soon as you will disappear and I will be able to go home and finish my lager.
Victor laughed, took his bag and jumped out from the chopper waving to the pilot while running towards the glazed room and Kurt. He stormed through the doors and fell into Kurt's arms. Kurt hugged him tightly and sighed with relief.
- You see…I told you that this romance will end badly. Did you really need it so much? - Kurt looked into Victor's red eyes.
- But I really love him…loved him. - Victor started sobbing again. - How could he do this to me Kurt? Couldn't he at least say something!? Of course I would have been mad…furious, but it would hurt much less that this disappearance…with Lavi in addition. - Victor hid his face in Kurt's jacket and burst into tears.
- Hey…shush. It's okay now, nobody will hurt you now and Karen will someday pay for what he has done to you. Don't cry…he is not worth it, save your tears for somebody who will deserve them. - Kurt smiled, lifting gently Victor's face.
- I'm really unhappy at this moment… - Victor sniffed, wiped off his tears and smiled wanly. - And I'm also sure that he will pay…
- See, that's the spirit! Go get him tiger. - Kurt laughed and stopped suddenly, looking at Victor closely.
- What? Do I look that bad…? - Victor blushed a bit.
- No. You are always perfect and tears make you even more stunning. - Now it was Kurt who blushed. - Ahem…I-I'm sorry, forget it…
- I'm a bit confused right now. - Victor was staring at Kurt with surprise. - You never were so…romantic…?
- That's because I'm…worried about you. - Kurt looked away, trying to hide his embarrassment.
- If you say so. - Victor shrugged. - I have to go and see my father now, will you wait?
- If you are going to see your dad, I will go see mine and we can meet by the exit?
- Fine, by the reception desk on the ground floor. - Victor nodded. - Say hi to Mr. Dresner from me.
- I will, but stop calling my dad like that. - Kurt goggled. - He is my dad and it's perfectly fine to call him that.
- Okay…so, say hi to your dad. Better? - Victor knitted his brows with irritation.
- Oh yes. Whole lot better now. - Kurt smiled and kissed him suddenly and then ran off.
Victor was standing in the same spot for few moments, trying to understand what did just happen. He touched his lips and looked in the direction where Kurt disappeared. This whole day was filled with too much excitement as for his mind, he had enough of surprises. Victor walked slowly into the lift and went down on the last floor where his father's office was located. He tried to make himself look better before going out from the lift, but with little success. With a heavy heart Victor walked to the secretary's desk and smiled to the woman kindly.
- Hello Betty, is my father busy right now? - Victor took a mint from a bowl standing on the desk.
- I'm sure he will be happy to see you anytime, but I will make sure anyway. - Betty smiled to him. - Take more if you like. - She giggled and pushed a bowl closer to Victor.
- Thanks… - Victor loved those mints, but his dad's company was the only place he could find them.
Betty called Vincent and they were talking for a few moments.
- You can go inside, but be quiet…your dad is in the middle of a really important conversation. - Betty whispered and winked.
- Thanks…I will be quiet as a mouse. - Victor whispered back and went into father's office.
It was a really huge place, with a glazed wall and many bookshelves filled with files and folders. There was also a big, dark desk covered with papers and there was a computer and pretty few phones standing on it. The first impression would be that there is a mess everywhere, but in reality everything was carefully placed on its place and memorised by the main mastermind, Vincent Farenhigh. Beside all those things, there were also two armchairs standing on the one side of the desk and one on the other, in which Victor's father was sitting now.
- Oui…Oui, merci beaucoup Monsieur Dubois. Au revoir Monsieur Dubois... - Vincent sighed and looked at Victor with a happy smile. - It's good that you came back from school. Your mother was so happy that she will be organising Christmas this year for sure, she even took two weeks off. That's a disaster but what could I do…women, can't live with them, can't live without them.
- Yeah…mum is a bit overreacting as always. Anyway, uncle asked me to tell both of you to call him because he wanted to visit. - Victor sat down on one of the armchairs.
- I will tell your mum because you will probably forget. - Vincent looked at Victor with a serious expression. - What happened son?
- Nothing much really…I'm just stupid and na?ve, that's all.
- My son is not permitted to be stupid nor na?ve. You are my first-born in the end.
- Yes, and this is my responsibility to look good for your sake. - Victor smiled and suddenly squint his eyes. - Dad…could you do something for me?
- I don't now yet, but I can promise that I will do my best.
- Do you know…Karen Rosenberg? - Victor was looking straight into Vincent eyes with a cold look.
- Of course…he was once my client and is staying in touch with my office. It seems that he is making a lot of trouble around him and is in need of the best lawyers often. Why do you ask? - Vincent was observing Victor closely, having a really bad feeling about what is coming.
- What would you do if I would ask you to ruin this guy? Not completely of course…but let's say…make him some more trouble to cope with. - Victor smiled nastily.
- Well…you will have to give me a really good reason to do that. - Vincent smiled a bit. He was interested because it was always so exciting to find all of the dirty things which people are hiding.
- He was my teacher…and my lover. He dumped me, left without a single word. - Victor clenched his fists with anger. - And it was even better in the end, he ran with someone else…another teacher.
- If it would be legal…I would have killed him for that. - Vincent banged his fist on the desk. - Nobody will treat my son like that…but well, I didn't know that you were…into boys, men. - Vincent cleared his throat.
- Well, I wasn't so sure about it either…until he appeared. So, will you do it for me?
- You can be sure of it my son. I will find every dirty secret of his, I will even know when he was swearing for the last time and when he forgot to wash his hands after a visit in a toilet…he will pay for your harm.
- Thanks dad, I really appreciate your efforts. - Victor walked to Vincent and hugged him for a moment.
- Yes, of course but get lost now, I'm busy and young Dresner is waiting downstairs.
- So soon? He is really fast…I'm going then, bye dad. - Victor went to the doors. - Oh, and dad?
- Yes…? Again… - Vincent sighed.
- When you will be home, tell mum that I won't be coming back today okay? I'm going out with Kurt and will probably stay in his place for the night.
- Fine, I will tell her…nothing new here, you and Kurt going for the whole night. Be careful Victor and don't spend too much money because the bank will block my credit cards.
- I will be careful, I promise. Bye then. - Victor went out and took another mint from the secretary's desk. - Bye Betty, have a nice Christmas.
- Oh, thank you Victor…you're such a good boy, have a nice Christmas also. - She smiled and waved to him when Victor was standing in the lift.
Vincent went out from his office shortly after the doors of the lift closed.
- Make me some coffee please, and then call Mr. Rosenberg's lawyer and find files from all of his cases and call our friend, Mr. Crowry.
- A detective? - Betty blinked with surprise. - Is that Rosenberg in trouble again?
- No…not yet. But he will be shortly. - Vincent smiled quizzically.
- Oh… - Betty suddenly felt really cold. - I will bring a coffee in a moment then. - She almost ran to the coffee machine.

Victor jumped on Kurt's back without any warning. Kurt almost screamed aloud, but he quickly recognised Victor's perfume and smiled.
- You got me now…I was quite scared for a moment. - He laughed.
- What am I doing wrong? - Victor moaned.
- I can recognise your scent and you are so light that it's barely noticeable when you jump on me. Something happened? You look much better now. - Kurt wrapped his arms around Victor's waist and was staring at him, completely lost. - I'm cross now.
- What? Why? Did I do something wrong…?
- Actually, yes. Why are you happy now and you were so sad before, even though it was me who was with you.
Victor laughed as soon as Kurt finished. Kurt's sulks were really too much for him to take with a serious face.
- Don't you dare to laugh at me! When I will get my hands on you…you will regret it so much! - Kurt jumped towards Victor, but he moved backward and ran away. - I really want to kill you sometimes.
- First try to catch me, and then threaten me. Our taxi is waiting outside, I need to change and take a shower if we are to go out tonight!
- I know and I'm coming aren't I? - Kurt sighed and walked after Victor. - You will fray me someday…But anyway, will you tell me why you are so happy? Considering your visit in your father's office it must be something pretty bad.
- I will tell you some other time, okay? Let's go now.
Kurt had a pretty bad feeling about Victor's new secret. They both got into the taxi and kept quiet about the issue. Kurt didn't want to pressure Victor and the other one wasn't too keen to talk about the case at all. Kurt wasn't sure why, but he was really worried. If Victor's father was involved into Victor's romance with Karen it was a beginning of a disaster. Everybody knew how powerful Vincent was and even though he was a pretty loving father and husband, he was absolutely ruthless considering business or when his precious family was hurt. Kurt shivered at this thought, if Victor told his father about everything and added something extra, as he was often doing, Karen was literally doomed. Of course, Karen was a very powerful persona, but only outside the law…Vincent was different, he could use the means of law and of the hounded underground. Vincent was the person that everybody respected and feared of the most. And of course, Karen ruled mostly in USA while Vincent had his web of influence outspread all over the globe, in every place that was useful and bringing money. To add to all of Karen's bad luck, he did deeply hurt the most important person in Vincent life, his own first-born son who maybe looked defenceless and na?ve but when someone was in his way Victor was as merciless as his father.

When they finally reached Kurt's home, Victor already was sleeping in the taxi. Kurt was looking at him with amazement. Who could suspect how cruel this beautiful person can be, the same person who is now sleeping with the face of an angel. But Kurt didn't really care about it, for him Victor was everything even though he never treated Kurt as somebody more than a loyal friend. Kurt leaned over him slowly and touched Victor's cheek with his finger tips. His skin was so smooth but coldish, as always. It was the only thing Kurt couldn't understand, Victor was never as warm as other people and it was the same with his mother and father. That's why everyone were afraid of them, the one's that never sweat and can hide their emotions so well that they look completely motionless. But Kurt, from all other people, liked this coldness of Victor's body; it was refreshing and somewhat exciting. He gently touched Victor's lips and smiled, he would do absolutely everything to posses those lips. But when he was so close to kissing Victor, the taxi suddenly stopped and Victor groaned, starting to wake up.
- We are here mister. - The taxi driver smiled into the mirror. - That will be fifteen pounds.
- Of course… - Kurt quickly retreated, giving up the rare hope of making his fantasy into reality. With a deep sigh he gave money to the driver and woke Victor up. - We are here Victor, hurry up and get going.
- So soon…? Ugh…thank you mister for the lift. - He smiled to the driver while getting out of the taxi.
- Nah, that was a pleasure. - The man laughed, waving the fifteen pounds to Victor who laughed.
Kurt followed Victor and shook his head slowly.
- Really, those jokes are bad. It's almost like people are doing everything for money these days.
- Well, they are actually. - Victor laughed. - You can buy everything now, even human's soul and conscience. Money will make everybody a killer, a whore or even a cesspool diver…
- So a killer and a whore are actually better in your eyes?
- Of course…they don't stink like shit. - Victor smiled sweetly.
- You are really, seriously ill…but still so daring. - Kurt moaned. - Let's go inside, we have to eat something, get changed and go out because the party is waiting for us!
Victor nodded with a happy smile and they rushed inside. Kurt offered himself to make something to eat, while Victor went downstairs to take a shower and start to prepare himself for the night. Kurt just couldn't wait to see Victor in all those sexy clothes, but what he saw was even better. Victor went downstairs with a towel around his waist, with wet hair and shiny skin.
- Sorry, it took me so long that I decided to eat first and then do the rest. - Victor smiled, sitting down at the table.
Kurt was close to dropping the soup he was carrying to the table. This view was just too much for him, all of his night fantasies suddenly became almost alive, at the reach of his hand…but Kurt knew that Victor will never allow him to get closer, he probably wasn't good enough.
- It's fine…Here, eat while it's hot. - Kurt placed a bowl with soup in front of Victor and sat on the opposite side of the table with a sad expression.
- Thanks…Is something wrong Kurt? - Victor could always tell what Kurt was feeling; it was the same with Kurt when Victor had problems.
- Nah, everything is perfect. You came back, we are eating soup together and will have some fun soon…what else could I possibly want? - Kurt tried to smile brightly. - Eat now.
Victor started eating and so did Kurt, but he could feel his friend's gaze all the time. Victor was concerned and when he was like that, it was almost impossible to hide something from him. Kurt was able to fool himself and Victor for nearly three years now but his feelings towards Victor were growing stronger, especially now when his dear friend had his heart broken and was absolutely alone and free. But Kurt couldn't act in any way because if he would there was a high possibility that Victor would be lost for him, even as a friend.
- Finished! - Victor quickly stood up. - Hey, Kurt! Hurry up and eat this soup or we will be late. I'm going upstairs to put my clothes on…you should do the same soon.
- I will come in a minute. - Kurt smiled and started eating slowly.
But as soon as he heard Victor running on the stairs, he threw the spoon into the bowl and spited out the soup he had in his mouth with a grimace. He couldn't swallow even the tiniest sip; his whole body was numb and trembling with lust. Kurt slowly walked to the bathroom downstairs and grabbed the washbasin with both hands. He couldn't control his body anymore; his mind was completely taken over by desire. Kurt leaned his body against the wall and unzipped his trousers. He was so ashamed to do it while having an image of half naked Victor before his eyes. He almost felt like he would be raping Victor, it disgusted him. But when his hand slipped into his briefs, everything disappeared and pleasure relieved the pain. Kurt closed his eyes and panted heavily. How much he wanted Victor right now, how much he wanted to embrace him, feel his smooth and cold skin close to his own.
- Victor… - Kurt gasped desperately. Everything started to spin around, faster and faster with every move of his hand.
The relief was greater than he thought. Kurt opened his eyes and looked at his hands with a totally blank expression. The last time he was with somebody was four years ago, it was that long when his body was able to relax fully and the time that was the worst in his whole life. It was then when Kurt thought that he was in love with an older girl and it was then when he had his first and last time with somebody. It was on summer holiday's time and Kurt was left alone by his parents. He was smart enough to invite his girlfriend for whole two days and yes, he hoped to score. Kurt couldn't know that Victor will suddenly come to visit, well actually he could, because Kurt's dad and Victor's parents were working together and when they were away, they were away at the exactly the same time. Kurt was always inviting Victor to his house on those occasions because Victor was afraid of staying alone, even with a babysitter. He was especially afraid of storms. Thunders and lightings were driving Victor into pure panic. But Kurt didn't invite Victor this time and he didn't care about the storm when it suddenly came because he had his girlfriend in his arms. Kurt practically forgot about Victor's existence.
Kurt was very tall and mature even though he only was twelve years old, completely different from his immature self now. He was calm and able to make older girls fell for his charms. And for Victor he was like a guardian and the person that would always be at his side to make him feel better. So it was no surprise that Victor ran away from his own house wanting to hide in Kurt's. Victor was so delicate and fearful when he was younger. Kurt was afraid to admit it, but it was probably his fault that Victor changed this much and this night was the time when those terrifying changes begun.
When Victor burst into Kurt's room, completely wet and sobbing Kurt didn't even notice. Both he and his girlfriend were at the end of the act, she was screaming and moaning from pleasure what probably shocked Victor even more. Victor was standing there, staring at them with his eyes huge and completely lost. Of course he knew what they were doing, but he probably never suspected that he will see Kurt in such situation. If there would be no sudden thunder outside, Kurt would probably never know that Victor was there. But when Victor shouted terrified in the moment of the thunderclap, Kurt's heart stopped with fear. He wasn't able to act quickly and Victor ran off before Kurt could chase after him. That was the end of his own relationship with the girl and the end of having Victor's full trust. And also the very moment when Kurt realized how much he loved Victor and the moment in which he could forget of ever being able to have Victor's love.
Kurt was able to find Victor after few hours of running around the neighbourhood. Victor was curled under the bench in the church. When they were little, Kurt was always taking Victor with him on Sunday's masses and the little Victor seemed to like the quiet and safety which the church building was giving.
Victor was always hugging Kurt tightly and refusing to let go during storms but that day, when Kurt wanted to pull him out from under the bench, for the first time Victor refused and Kurt had to drag him out by force. And what he saw in his eyes was not fear but hate and then Kurt thought that Victor was actually feeling betrayed and jealous. On that one day Kurt lost him completely and forever. Even though from then on he was desperately trying to regain Victor's trust, he was unable to do so. And after four long years Victor was still wary of him and was keeping many secrets only for himself. But there was one positive side effect- Victor's fear of thunderstorms disappeared for good.
Suddenly knocking to the bathroom's door cut short his moment of contemplation.
- Kurt! What are you doing in there for so long?! Are you dead or what? Because if you are not I will kill you if you will stay in this bathroom for any longer! - Victor banged on the doors few more times.
- Eh…? I-I'm coming…give me a second… - Kurt washed his hands in a hurry and cleaned the mess before going out to see Victor.
He was all dressed up in tight, black jeans and a see-through shirt. This clothing was uncovering his body more than covering. Kurt moaned inside, he suddenly felt that Victor is torturing him on purpose.
- We will be late because of your laziness. Go and change your clothes. - Victor pushed him towards the stairs.
- I'm going, take it easy! - Kurt almost ran upstairs to break free from Victor.
- Really, he is just unbearable… - Victor licked his lips with a scary grin.

Of course they were late, massively late. And Victor was hitting Kurt almost all the time blaming him for everything bad in the whole world. But when they came inside, it was clear that they didn't miss much. The club was full of weird people who were dancing like crazy with absolutely rhythm-less and some completely drunk girls were singing karaoke even though they were totally tone deaf. Kurt was staring at all of this with an open mouth, he was shocked, completely.
- Well Kurt, it seems that you failed this time… - Victor giggled. - This place…is absolutely horrible!
- How could I know about it! Everybody was happy with this club! - Kurt cried out. - What will we do now…? I'm so sorry Victor, I honestly didn't know! And from all moments it had to be today when you wanted to have fun…
- It's okay. I will be able to laugh till death! Look at all this; it's so pathetic that is funny. - Victor laughed pointing at one girl that fell over and other people started walking on her. - But you will have to buy me lots of alcohol now. Where is some bar…?
- There… - Kurt took Victor's hand into his and pulled him towards the bar, full of drinks, beer and vodka. - What do you want Victor? - They both sat down on high bar stools.
- Mad Dogs please! And one pint of beer for the beginning…
- You will be dead before midnight. - Kurt laughed but ordered the same for himself.
- Well, then you will carry me back home. - Victor smiled and took one Mad Dog. - Cheers!
- Cheers…
Because they weren't really used to drinking, especially Victor, they were really drunk before midnight, just as Kurt predicted. Kurt was still able to think clearly and walk almost straight, but Victor was a total mess. He was giggling all the time, couldn't stand up and started singing random songs. Kurt decided that they should be going now, because the situation was starting to be dangerous after some girls recognised Victor as a son of Farenhighs, and Victor was acting unpredictably. Kurt was lucky because Kurt had to carry him all the way to the taxi rank but Victor was light like a feather so it wasn't so difficult.
- Kurt…my sweet and loyal and loving Kurt…where are we going now? - Victor was hugging him tightly and smiling at him with love which Kurt didn't see for years.
- Home Victor. Are you feeling alright? - Kurt smiled back at him.
- Yup. I won't throw up…don't worry. - Victor giggled. - Hey, I will tell you something very important when we will be back at home, okay?
- Of course, but you will forget about it until then. - Kurt laughed. - I'm sure of it.
- I won't! I really want to tell you my deepest secret, because I trust you and I want you to know that…
- I know that Victor… - Kurt smiled gently. - Here we are, a taxi is standing there, come on hop in…
Kurt helped Victor to lie down in the back and he sat at the front, giving the address to the driver. Victor fell asleep as soon as the taxi drove off and Kurt sighed unhappily, he won't be able to hear Victor's secret in the end. He was somewhat disappointed.
- Your friend is really drunk…are you sure he will not make a mess in my car? - The driver was glancing at Victor from time to time.
- I'm sure, but if you want to be sure that I suggest driving faster… - Kurt snapped at him impatiently, he wanted to be back home and go to bed.
- Of course… - The driver didn't say a word more but he did drive faster and after ten minutes they stopped in front of Kurt's house.
Kurt paid for the taxi in a hurry and pulled Victor out from the back. Victor opened his eyes and smiled unconsciously.
- Are we home now? Put me down, I can walk now… - Victor grabbed Kurt's hand and slowly followed him to the doors.
- We are, and you are going straight to bed…To be so drunk, you should be ashamed. - Kurt laughed. - Anybody could rob you, rape you and you would forget about it.
- No I wouldn't. And I'm not going to bed until I will be clean and until I will tell you what I promised to tell.
- Oh, so you remember! That's something unusual. - Kurt hugged him. - Go to the bathroom then, brush your teeth, wash yourself and I will prepare your bed.
- Okay, I will be back in a moment so wait for me in there.
- I will wait. - Kurt went inside the guest bedroom and made a bed ready in a hurry.
Victor came back wearing only a towel around his waist, again. Kurt had really enough of this for one day, but he could do nothing.
- Put your pyjamas on…you will catch a cold. - Kurt was staring at the wall, trying to ignore Victor's presence until he will be in the pyjamas.
- No, not yet. I'm still wet a bit. - Victor sat down on the bed, close to Kurt. - Look at me please because I need to talk with you. But you must promise to take my words seriously…
Kurt looked at him with hesitation.
- I'm always taking you seriously and you know it. - He sighed. - What do you want to tell me?
- How should I begin… - Victor started tapping his lip with his finger. - Well, you probably did notice that I and my parents are a bit different from other…people, right?
- Well…you all are motionless when you have to be, you never sweat and your bodies are cooler that those of other people…are you talking about those differences?
- Yes, exactly. Well, you see, we are not entirely normal people… - Victor smiled. - My dad and I especially, because he was born like this…and then he changed my mum and I was born.
- I'm a bit confused…are you sick of something? - Kurt blinked, totally lost.
- No, it's not like that, dummy! - Victor sighed. - I will say it straight. I…we are vampires.
Kurt was staring at Victor for a moment and then burst out laughing.
- Oh, right! It's so obvious now! You are a vampire….! - Kurt couldn't stop himself from laughter.
- Hey! You promised to take me seriously!
- Victor, holly fuck! Do you think I'm stupid or what? Do I look like I look like a down to you? Vampire! Don't make me laugh again please! - Kurt smirked. - Of course, you are soo afraid of holy water, garlic, crosses, your fangs are so long and you are drinking blood. Oh, come on!
- Well…the last two are real. - Victor whispered. - And my father and mum are older than it seems…
- Cut this crap now, I'm going to bed. I've had enough of this lame jokes and I stupidly hoped to hear something important. - Kurt stood up quickly.
- Kurt! Wait! I'm not lying to you! I know it's hard to believe but its true…I-I can prove it to you. - Victor cried desperately and pulled Kurt back.
- Yeah, right. I'm waiting for you to bite me! - Kurt laughed angrily. - What? Why do you hesitate? Oh, I know! Because you are not, absolutely not, able to bite anybody!
Victor clenched his fists and he suddenly hit Kurt straight into the stomach. Kurt groaned with surprise falling down on the bed and writhing in pain. Victor sat on him and seized his wrists, immobilising Kurt completely.
- At first it's not really pleasant…and some people find it disgusting because of the smell of blood…but you insisted. - Victor looked at Kurt's carotid artery and smiled to him.
Kurt's eyes went wide with sudden fear when he saw Victor's purple eyes and sharp fangs that suddenly appeared in his mouth. But he still couldn't really believe it; he thought it's just a stupid trick. But then Victor leaned over his neck and Kurt felt fang slowly breaking his skin and flesh. He started screaming with terror.
- Stop it! Stop it! What are you doing! I said stop! - He wanted to break loose but Victor was surprisingly strong and enabled even the slightest movement of Kurt's.
Kurt gave up after few moments. He could smell his own blood now and hear a soft noise which Victor was making while sucking the blood from Kurt's artery. When he was relatively calm, something started to change. His body started heating up suddenly and the whole act was almost as pleasant as sex. Kurt closed his eyes and moaned with pleasure, he felt that the heat is slowly going down, culminating in one place...but he didn't care now, it was so good.
- More…more… - Kurt moved his hands over Victor's naked back and stopped on his bottom. - It's so good… - Before he knew, his hands untied the towel from Victor's waist and it fell on the floor.
Kurt hugged Victor closer and he felt his delicate fingers running impatiently through his hair. Kurt couldn't keep quiet anymore, it was the best moment to say everything what he wanted to say to Victor.
- Victor…I also need to tell you something… - He whispered quietly. - You…you are the most important person in my whole life. I wanted to tell you this years ago but I just couldn't, I was afraid that you will abandon me completely. Victor, I love you from the bottom of my heart…
Victor suddenly stopped and gently removed his teeth from Kurt's neck, ending his feeding with a lick to stop the bleeding. He looked at Kurt carefully, straight into his eyes, trying to guess whether he is really telling a truth. But there was nothing suspicious in Kurt's gaze, it was soft and loving, as always but Victor failed to see it earlier.
- Kurt…why didn't you tell me. - Victor whispered sadly. - It must've been terrible when I was telling you about me and Karen and about all other relationships…I'm so sorry.
- Don't be sorry, you couldn't know about my hidden feelings. I was so afraid…because you stopped trusting me after this night and… - Kurt had to stop talking because Victor put a finger on his lips.
- Shush…don't babble about past now. - Victor smiled softly. - And I trust you…I always trusted you. - Victor kissed him gently and Kurt froze in shock. - Do you believe me Kurt? That I am a vampire?
- How couldn't I believe after what you have done to me…? And I can taste blood in your mouth…It's kind of awful but this feeling was absolutely exceptional. - Kurt smiled. - You have my permission to bite.
- You can be sure I will make use of this permission. But, leaving my vampirism aside…can I ask you a question? - Victor looked straight into Kurt's eyes.
- You just did… - Kurt smiled and Victor growled at him. - Please, don't eat me! Shoot.
- Do you want to be with me…? Like a couple…
- What? Are you serious? Not joking? - Kurt blinked and Victor nodded quickly. - W-well…of course. It's a stupid question! That's my deepest desire from ages…
- I'm happy… - Victor smiled and kissed Kurt without any unnecessary delays.
Kurt murmured with pleasure and turned around, laying Victor underneath him. He wanted him so badly that he almost couldn't resist.
- Can I…we? - Kurt looked at Victor quickly.
- I would be really furious if we wouldn't… - Victor clasped his arms around Kurt's neck and pulled him closer. - Kiss me now or else I will go mad…
Kurt smiled, still couldn't believe in his sudden luck and that Victor really was lying under him. He kissed Victor desperately, wanting to check whether he is real.
- Kurt…can I do it again…? - Victor whispered into his ear while gently moving his hands over Kurt's chest.
- Do what exactly…- Kurt gasped suddenly when Victor moved his hand on his trousers.
- Bite you… - Victor smiled.
- Of course, I have absolutely no objections…but remember to stop when you should, I would be happy to live just a bit longer if it's okay? - Kurt shut his eyes and bit his lip, trying to calm his body down.
- Kurt, when exactly was your last time with somebody…your body is reacting weirdly.
- That would be…four years ago, you should remember it well.
Victor paused for a moment, staring at Kurt with amazement and then he suddenly started laughing.
- You have to be joking! It was your last time? What about Krish? - Victor threw Kurt off of himself and sat on him slowly.
- I told you, it didn't work out. Why? Because I didn't care about her, you just misinterpreted my signs…it was always about you.
Victor looked at him and sighed. He was feeling really guilty now. In the end it was his fault that Kurt thought that Victor is not trusting him, maybe he even thought that he hates him. All those years demolished their relations, crushed the bond which was between them for so long and all this because of one bad night.
- I'm sorry…if I would only know earlier. - Victor kissed him gently. - And I was talking about all my love affairs with you…and was angry when you were concerned and worried about me…
- Can we forget about our unfortunate past and move forward please...especially now. I really don't want to be rude…but my trousers are going to blow up soon…if you will keep wriggle about all the time.
- Oh, I'm sorry… - Victor blushed with embarrassment.
- Stop apologizing and start acting… - Kurt moaned.
- Sorry! - Victor giggled. - I will do it today okay? You shall only enjoy and learn.
- Fine by me.
Victor smiled and leaned over Kurt's neck. He slowly bit him again, trying to give him as much pleasure and as little pain as possible. Kurt murmured something quietly and closed his eyes. Victor, still sucking into Kurt's neck, quickly removed all clothes that he could reach. It was his first time making love to somebody who knew who Victor is, and in addition making use of his teeth. It was so good to be accepted. Victor moved away when the time came and kissed Kurt passionately. Immediately Kurt wrapped his arms around Victor's waist and his hands started exploring once again. He was much calmer and relaxed now. Kurt looked into Victor's eyes and smiled with much love, he was so happy that he could die now. Victor smiled back at him and made his move, slowly imbibing Kurt into his insides. Both of them gasped at the same moment, clasping each other firmly. Victor kissed Kurt's cheek, chin and lips, leaving wet marks on him. This whole moment was better than Victor imagined, it was more intense than any sex he ever had. But it also ended very quickly…
- Victor…I… - Kurt moaned quietly. His body couldn't hold back for any longer. He felt a heat wave rushing through his body and suddenly it was over. He could only see black dots dancing before his eyes and his body became weak and flabby.
- Hey…so soon? It's really unfair… - Victor giggled. - Well, I thought it will end like this…how was it? - He kissed Kurt's forehead.
- Blimey…It was unbelievable. - Kurt smiled and sat up slowly. - I love you… - Kurt pushed him on the bed.
Victor was speechless, it was the first time that somebody said it to him, and it sounded so naturally. Victor sniffed and tears ran down his cheeks suddenly.
- I'm sorry…but it sounded so beautifully… - He looked at Kurt. - I think…that I love you too.
- I'm not going to rush you. It's clear that you need time to get over this old bastard. - Kurt lay down on top of him. - And now…let me rest for a bit…I will make it up to you, this small failure of my unsatisfied body.
- I surely hope so! Goodnight Kurt… - Victor yawned and nestled down in his arms. - Oh, and please don't take me to this club ever again…
- You can count on that.
They were both quickly asleep after such a long day. All this nervousness, despair and shocking news exhausted them. Kurt was hugging Victor tightly as if he would fear that his lover will disappear before he will wake up. They were sleeping peacefully, without any dreams, enjoying newly gained happiness and stability. Kurt's greatest desire was fulfilled; he could feel Victor's cool body resting next to his for the whole night.













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Aquarius dnia padziernika 09 2011 15:12:28
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Rasnick (Brak e-maila) 11:25 24-12-2007
Very interesting story. I'm wating for next chapters!
Azira (Brak e-maila) 15:15 24-12-2007
Nie wiem czy mam pisac tu po polsku czy angielsku teraz!;]
Musze niestety ze smutkiem stwierdzic ze to nie o ta wersje pierwszego chaptera mi chodzilo, ale najwyrazniej moj kolejny mail jest gdzies daleeko i czeka w kolejce...ah,jak juz do was dotrze to zmiencie proosze(to do drogich zalozycieli!)
Mam nadzieje,ze wam sie spodoba i ze wogole bedzie fajnie.

Well,for everyone talking and writing in english, I hope you will like it! It's a first version of this chapter...I did send another one but it's probably stuck somewhere faaar away and it will take some time to fall into admin's hands!smiley Hope everyone is happy!

Piszcie komenty bo to baardzo mile i potrzebnesmiley
Figaro (Brak e-maila) 08:51 31-01-2008
W ten sposób to ja mogę szlifować angielski smiley))) Opowiadanie jest bardzo dobre technicznie i cholernie wciągające. zabieram się właśnie za Twoje pozostałe, mam nadzieje, że płodność masz we krwi (pisarską oczywiście smiley)
Ganimedes (Brak e-maila) 09:25 31-01-2008
Własnie skończyłam... super... naprawdę super. Musze przetrawić i dopiero wtedy się konstruktywniej wypowiem. teraz... super...
Me (Brak e-maila) 12:34 31-01-2008
Marvelous! I'm waiting for more smiley
Matoko (Brak e-maila) 16:37 31-01-2008
Ful wypas! Kolejne części dać!
Azira (Brak e-maila) 00:25 01-02-2008
O jaa! Ale jestem happy normalnie,ze wam sie podoba! Staram sie baardzo jesli chodzi o to opo, mam juz prawie skonczone kolejne 2 rozdzialy wiec niebawem rowniez sie pojawia!
Thanks for all the good words if anyone here is speaking only english haha! I hope you will like it till the end!
Oki (Brak e-maila) 19:05 17-02-2008
No coraz bardziej wciąga. DO tego stopnia, że musiałem sobie przynieść slownik, żeby wychwycić smaczki językowe, a zazwyczaj nie zawracam tym sobie glowy. Piszcie dalej, bo świetnie Wam to wychodzi.
Azira (Brak e-maila) 02:04 18-02-2008
dzieki za mile slowosmiley Staramy sie bardzo:]mam nadzieje ze kolejny rozdzial bedzie gotowy na nast aktualke...obyy..troche tez i czasu malo mamy wiec z korekta i sklejaniem do kupy sa problemy;p
Mey (Brak e-maila) 22:29 24-02-2008
Szifowanie angielskiego to moj priorytet.
a takna poważnie to bardzo mi się podoba, jest ciekawie napisane i wciąga, a akcja 'tato... facet mnie rzucił - zrób mu cos' mnie ujęła pozytywnie.
z innej beczki i czystej ciekawości, mozecie przetłumaczyc na polski tytuł opowiadania smiley
pozdrawiam
Azira (Brak e-maila) 21:46 27-02-2008
Ah,ja tez musze szlifowac wiec takie pisanie opek po angielsku jest pomocnesmiley co do 'La Suite' to po polsku jest 'Ciag dalszy' czy tez 'Nastepstwo' po francusku oczywsciesmiley
Ravenblack (Brak e-maila) 10:14 23-03-2008
Intrygujące i wciągające. Więcej poproszę!
Ha Neul (Brak e-maila) 00:26 24-03-2008
ale crap xD
Azira (Brak e-maila) 14:43 24-03-2008
ehhm, nie zwracajcie uwagi na mojego negatywnego wspoltworce...pisze swietnie a i tak marudzi!
Cieszymy sie,ze wam sie podoba i piszcie komenty, piszcie!!w koncu czytelnicy tez musza miec jakis obowiazek wzgledem piszacych!!smiley
kotek.mamrotek (kotek.mamrotek@gmail.com) 21:38 04-06-2008
Nie polecam czytać tego opowiadania w celu "szlifowania" angielskiego, bo już po pierwszym akapicie widzę, że jest parę błędów. Złe użyciu czasów, wygląda na to, że autorki znają tylko i wyłącznie past simple tense oraz past continuous tense, w jednym miejscu jest tzw. kalka z języka polskiego, gdzieś się przewinął przymiotnik zamiast przysłówka (lub odwrotnie, już nie pamiętam). Nie chcę nikogo odrzucać, bo to może być niezły kawał prozy (lub nie), ale zalecam ostrożność.
Azira (Brak e-maila) 01:32 06-06-2008
hej no chwila, to jest amatorskie opowiadanie i nikt tutaj nie pisal ze sluzy do nauki angielskiego bo od tego jest szkola, jesli ktos ma dobry poziom. Plus, ta wasza mania na punkcie czasow jest chora, tutaj niewiele osob sie tym przejmuje, chyba ze chcesz czytac Homera albo inne wielkie dziela literackie. W zwyklym, codziennym angielskim na ulicy, ba w szkole, mowi sie prosto i szybko i duzo brytyjczykow patrzy na polakow dziwnie gdy ci wyskakuja im z nazwami czasow. To jest strona z opowiadaniami a nie gramatyka angielska...a przez takie komentarze wlasnie ludzie traca chec czytania, wiec uwagi prosze zachowywac dla siebie jesli chodzi o wynioslosc jezyka albo jakies bledy....to tak na przyszlosc. Ludzie dzieki pisaniu i czytaniu sie rozwijaja,a nawet polak robi bledy w polskim jezyku(niektorzy nawet nie mowia poprawnie).
I er...kotek, nikt nie ma tego czytac zeby szlifowac grammar jedyne co moga szlifowac to zawartosc slownika.
I wypraszam sobie znajomosc tylko dwoch czasow, w koncu siedze w wlk. brytanii dostatecznie dlugo by znac ich o wiele wiecej(skoro moge byc w college'u i dostawac A z esejow). Jesli masz jakies uwagi co do jezyka to prosze konsultowac to z autorami.
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